The Younger the Better

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This summer holiday, my uncle asked me to teach my cousin during the holiday. I’ve heard that it would not be an easy job. Anyhow it means duty. I’m afraid that I’ll give up at the half time. But I decided to do it, taking the chance to train myself. Just teaching a junior, it won’t be as difficult as I thought. I’m sure if I prepare well nothing can trip me.
With this faith I spend a week on preparing materials and writing the plan. When I met my cousin I found that everything I prepared was useless. He almost learned nothing the past year; even forget the basic rules of arithmetic. So we had to start at the very beginning, just as what’s 7 by 6. That’s not the main problem. When he have classes he pretended listening very carefully, infect the words I said just go across his ears. One day I found he was very familiar with computer games. When we talk about games I found his eyes were shining. Oh, when I at was his age I even don’t know what’s computer. He said his mother promised him to go Internet bar to play computer games at weekends. That is very different from my understanding. How can he get in the internet bar, he is not old enough. I’m sure his playing must be more than the weekends, and I finally found the reason why he can’t concentrate on study.
They live in a high-technology society. It makes the life convenient, but on the other side it ruined our life, especially the youth. These years more and more teenage were attracted by the computer games. Many of my game friends are no more than 15. Internet problem is just a drop of the sea. Recently the milk power accident hit everyone mind. With this experience, can we say the young the better? No, we afraid they would be poisoned before they grownup.

Cinderella

1 You shift the tense now and then.

2 The story of your teaching your niece is too long and detailed. It serves only as a typical example in this composition so I don't think it should run so long.

3 The story is not typical instance.

4 The story doesn't necessarily leads to your criticism of the younger generation. Lack of more evidence, this argumentation is not convincing at all. So I'm sorry to say this composition is only a failure.