Celebrity effect

kyla

Celebrity effect
A couple of days ago, I happened to join in a programme held by some famous media in the auditorium of our university. Not until the moment I entered in the hall after queuing up for quite a long time did I realized that it was a charity concert
The singers were raising money for those who were in dire need of help. That night two super voice girls and another famous singer were the honored guests. They had to assume responsibility for the charitable activities. They had to collect enough money by their songs and popularity. That’s indeed a good idea, I thought, the celebrities acted in a much better way than I had expected.
Fortunately I got a seat in the front of the auditorium so that I could see them more clearly. And unfortunately I was surrounded by a group of “vitamins” who were the fans of Tan Weiwei. They came from other cities or even other provinces, waiting for several hours outside with the only purpose of seeing and supporting their icon. They knew every song of her, her birthday, her hobbies, everything about her. It seemed that she was the hope to their life. It was crazy!
Nevertheless, the celebrities may have noticed and should notice that they are influencing their fans greatly. Since they have this kind of advantages, why not make good use of it? Why not guide their fans to do some really meaningful things for the sake of our society?
They can involve in charitable activities to help others, to show patriotism publicly when our country are facing difficulties instead of propagandizing their own albums, books and movies here and there.
If they do it, they are able to affect a large number of people. Whether they want to take the opportunity to popularize themselves or not, if their behaviors impact on others in a positive way, we should respect them. Only with the concerted effort of everyone, both the celebrities and our ordinary people can help the development of our country!
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Since they have this kind of advantages, why not make good use of it? Why not guide their fans to do some really meaningful things for the sake of our society?
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but according to the beginning of your passage, they are doing some charity, aren't they? So you are not reasonable to ask them such a question.

kyla

kyla

The cult of celebrities and its effect

We are not surprised to find that the fans are traveling from one city to another, on the sole purpose of enjoying every concert of their favorite singer. Millions of people are obsessed with celebrity. They pay close attention to the lives and behaviors of these people regardless of the money and their invaluable time. Now with the Internet and television running a constant stream of celebrity images, news and gossip, people is bombarded daily with a lifestyle many aspire to.

Is it wise to jump on the bandwagon? Not really.

The cult of celebrity has an adverse effect. There has been a dramatic shift in society regarding values and aspirations.

Our values are changing. Most people are able to air the views on the so-called celebrities while fail to know the real heroes of the history. Celebrities are no longer famous for doing something regarded as ethically and socially beneficial. Many are famous simply for their beauty and figure. The media puts the biggest spotlight on these flawless celebrities. So the teenagers are unhappy with who they are, what they wear and what they look like! They want to be one of the celebrities and finally lose the precise aim in life.

Society’s aspirations are also changing, primarily for occupations, where the more glamorous jobs are now sought after, especially media related.

It seems that the problem can not be addressed unless the celebrities act for good causes, participate in society, and have good morals step up in the spotlight and become a proper idol for today's youth.

kyla

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The cult of celebrity has an adverse effect.  For celebrities are no longer famous for doing something regarded as ethically and socially beneficial. Many are famous simply for their beauty and figure. The media puts the biggest spotlight on these "flawless" celebrities, who in turn become idol of the teenagers. So the teenagers are unhappy with who they are, what they wear and what they look like! They want to be one of the celebrities and pursue this aim blindly until finally lose their precise goal in life.________________how about improving it in this way?

Society’s aspirations are also changing, primarily for occupations, where the more glamorous jobs are now sought after, especially media related. __________what's this to do with celebrity effect? you have to make it clear by elaborating on it.

It seems that the problem can not be addressed unless the celebrities act for good causes, participate in society, and have good morals step up in the spotlight and become a proper idol for today's youth.______________what problem? and the sentence after "unless" is grammatically false.

kyla

The cult of celebrities and its effect

We are not surprised to find that the fans are traveling from one city to another, on the sole purpose of enjoying every concert of their favorite singer. Millions of people are obsessed with celebrity. They pay close attention to the lives and behaviors of these people regardless of the money and their invaluable time. Now with the Internet and television running a constant stream of celebrity images, news and gossip, people is bombarded daily with a lifestyle many aspire to.

Is it wise to jump on the bandwagon? Not really.

The cult of celebrity has an adverse effect.  For celebrities are no longer famous for doing something regarded as ethically and socially beneficial. Many are famous simply for their beauty and figure. The media puts the biggest spotlight on these "flawless" celebrities, who in turn become idol of the teenagers. So the teenagers are unhappy with who they are, what they wear and what they look like! They want to be one of the celebrities and pursue this aim blindly until finally lose their precise goal in life.

To avoid any further negative impact , it is advisable for the celebrities to act for good causes, participate in society, and have good morals step up in the spotlight and become a proper idol for today's youth.